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敲黑板放大招之高考英语作文提分技巧
在高考英语中,作文是让很多人都颇为头疼的部分,但同时,也是能快速提分的部分。

相对于需要提升词汇量、提高阅读速度和准确性的阅读理解来说,作文的提分相对更明晰,也能更快地运用,抓住四大重点,即使面对较难的作文题目,作文分数也不会差得太多。

2020年12月,经过近1个月的征集、评审,北京情系远山公益基金会第一届“我与高中双师公益课堂”中英文作文大赛圆满落下帷幕,今天就以学生英文组的一等奖作文为例,来讲解一下这四大重点。

学生英文组题目回顾


a.如果你需要向你的外国朋友介绍“高中双师课堂”,围绕“你和高中双师课堂”,写一封书信,字数在150字左右。


b.互联网技术的崛起,为教育带来了巨大的改变,请以“我看互联网教育”为主题,写一篇英语作文,字数在150字左右。


01

内容要点,一个不漏


英语作文首先要有一条基本的底线,就是题目中的要点,都必须在作文中有所体现,要时刻谨记。如果是缺少了重要要点,那就会降低一个评分档次。

贵州黔西一中徐漂漂同学的作品,论点明晰,从正反两方面全面地探讨了互联网教育的优势与劣势。


My views on Internet education

贵州黔西一中  高三19班  徐漂漂

指导教师  彭伦文


    Nowadays , with the rapid development of technology and economy, Internet education has become an increasingly important part in our daily life. Not only does it provide us with a convenient platform but also makes our study more colorful and interesting. Here are my views on it.


    Above all, faced with the difficulties that Corona Virus Disease has brought to education, it is Internet education that makes it possible for all the students to study again, just like what the Ministry of education said:“suspended class, ongoing learning.”Moreover,what benefits us most is that it can not only broaden our horizons but also enrich our knowledge. Helpful and useful, our excellent and professional teachers can have live classes for us students,by which we can be educated better and make great progress.Communicating with teachers directly is also an advantage of Internet education. At the same time, I have to say that there are also some drawbacks, for example, it may do harm to our eyes and decrease our activity in study. However,I am convinced that as long as we make every effort to cut down the harm that the Internet may do to us and make full use of it,we will turn the disadvantages into advantages.


All in all, so convenient and useful is Internet education that I hold the firm belief that it will possess a bright future and make our learning more interesting as well as efficient.


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结构明晰,文章连贯


在高考英语作文中,三段式是很常用的结构。简洁明了,观点明确,结构清晰。贵州毕节四中陈思凌的作品,就采用了三段式。

第一段从寒暄、主题、写作目的三个方面出发,内容简洁,无冗余。第二段主要表达了双师课堂对学生的帮助,情感真切。第三段再次回扣主题,期待回信。

文章整体结构流畅,思路清晰,是信件中的高分作文。


Dear John

贵州毕节四中  高三1班  陈思凌

指导教师:幸贵丹


Dear John,

     How is everything going? Knowing that you are interested in my experience in the Double Teacher class. I am writing to share it with you.


     First of all, the Double Teacher class means that two teachers can help us in our study. A teacher communicates with us through the Internet to realize online teaching for us. Another teacher can accompany us in school and we can have face to face classes. What's more, It is the Double Teacher class that enables us to contact the education of famous teachers and get better education. Last but not the least, I have been in contact with the English Double Teacher class for about two years, my English scores have improved a lot. Not only did I learn how to remember words better, but also I knew how to write compositions well and so on. I really appreciate the help of teachers. I will work hard in the future study.


      If you want to know more about the Double Teacher class, please feel free to ask me. I am looking forward to hearing from you.


Yours,

Li Hua.


03

词汇高级,语法复杂



这是指运用“表达准确的单词+语法点丰富的句型”。如河北广宗县第一中学的徐广宁的作品,就使用了多变的句型和高级词汇。

文章句式包括高中阶段学习的主要句型,如:形式主语:It is undeniable that….;it can be said with certainty that….主语从句:what must be mentioned is that….除此之外,表语从句,定语从句,插入语也都在文章中灵活运用,文意清晰,表达流畅。

文章词汇地道准确,比如用advent (the coming of an important event, person, invention, etc) 来修饰网络技术;用generate (to produce or create sth.) 来代替produce的使用等,都展示出小作者的词汇功底。


Internet Education

河北广宗县第一中学  336班  徐广宁

指导教师:魏延荣


Recently, with the advent and development of the Internet technology, there has been a growing concern among the public over the topic of the Internet Education.


It is undeniable that the Internet education will definitely generate a variety of positive effects. To begin with, the Internet education can foster a fairer environment for students from different backgrounds. Take our Double Teachers Class online as an example, we can have easy access to all the advanced educational resources from every corner of the globe, which overcomes the geographical barriers. Moreover, what must be mentioned is that the Internet education promotes individual abilities and interests in a free and open form of learning, taking different learning speeds of the students into consideration. Last but not least, it can be said with certainty that we would never go through the hard time during the epidemic in 2020 without the Internet education.


Considering all the advantages discussed above, it is advisable that we highly value the Internet education and apply to in our studies. We are, therefore, supposed to take a positive attitude and believe that it will have a promising prospect. 


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书写工整,卷面美观


 
一是字迹工整美观,二是尽量不要涂改。关于字体,建议尽量选择类似印刷体的字体,比如知名的“衡水体”,因为印刷体工整、易于辨认,在老师大量阅卷时,也能很快看懂你写的是什么。相对的,圆体、花体字太过个性化,虽然好看却不适合考试时使用。

本次的一等奖作品,都达到了这个标准,在卷面整洁方面让人眼前一亮:




内容、结构、语法、书写,组成高考作文评分标准中的重要方面,把握住这四点,不断打磨精进,就能把握住高考英语作文分数。这些大招小编get到了,你呢?



感谢:北京情系远山公益基金会高中项目组公益教师尹长然、李宇倩、杨建革、李青青老师对基金会第一届“我与高中双师公益课堂”中英文作文大赛英文作品的评审与支持。

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